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Amybal
Posted: Wednesday, July 21, 2021 12:26:16 PM
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Hi, is there anything wrong in these sentences?

Short summary
A life-threatening hide-and-seek between a psychopathic killer and Kyung-mi, a girl with hearing impairment.

Long summary
Kyeong-mi, a deaf girl, works as a sign language counselor at the sign language call center. One night she witnesses So Jung-eun's stabbing and becomes a new target for the Jekyll and Hyde serial killer Do-sik. It now turns into a silent chase. Jong Tak, So Jung-eun's brother, a security guard has to protect her sister. On the other hand Kyung-mi's deaf mother can do anything to protect her daughter.
The One And Only Emily
Posted: Wednesday, July 21, 2021 2:23:50 PM

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It is supposed to look like this: Short summary
A life-threatening hide-and-seek between a psychopathic killer and Kyung-mi, a girl with hearing impairment.

Long summary
Kyeong-mi, a deaf girl, works as a sign language counselor at the sign language call center. One night she witnesses So Jung-eun's stabbing and becomes a new target for the Jekyll and Hyde serial killer Do-sik. It now turns into a silent chase. Jong Tak, So Jung-eun's brother, a security guard, has to protect his sister. On the other hand, Kyung-mi's deaf mother can do anything to protect her daughter.
FounDit
Posted: Wednesday, July 21, 2021 6:52:29 PM

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Amybal wrote:
Hi, is there anything wrong in these sentences?
My suggestions:

Short summary
A life-threatening hide-and-seek between a psychopathic killer and Kyung-mi, a girl with hearing impairment.

Long summary
Kyeong-mi, a deaf girl, works as a sign language counselor at the sign language call center. One night she witnesses So Jung-eun's stabbing and becomes a new target for the Jekyll and Hyde serial killer, Do-sik. It now turns into a silent chase. Jong Tak, So Jung-eun's brother, a security guard has to protect his sister. On the other hand, Kyung-mi's deaf mother can't do anything to protect her daughter.
Wilmar (USA) 1M
Posted: Wednesday, July 21, 2021 7:58:41 PM

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The short summary is an incomplete sentence.
Amybal
Posted: Thursday, July 22, 2021 9:58:16 PM
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Thank you FounDit and The One And Only Emily.

Noted Wilmar (USA) 1M.
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