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vipin viswanathan
Posted: Monday, June 29, 2020 12:08:37 PM

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In the near future, synthetic meat will hit the market for a cheap price so there is a high probability to create problems for farmers.

Could you edit the sentence?

FounDit
Posted: Monday, June 29, 2020 12:12:41 PM

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vipin viswanathan wrote:
In the near future, synthetic meat will hit the market for a cheap price so there is a high probability to create problems for farmers.

Could you help me edit the sentence?


I assume you want help with the wording, so I suggest something like:

In the near future, synthetic meat will be available in markets at a cheap price, which may create problems for farmers.
tautophile
Posted: Tuesday, June 30, 2020 12:11:28 AM
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I would recommend something like this:

In the near future, inexpensive synthetic meats may become available to consumers, and this may adversely affect the existing meat industry and people in it.

By "meats" I mean the flesh of various animals that are raised for food.
sureshot
Posted: Tuesday, June 30, 2020 2:21:28 AM
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FounDit wrote:
vipin viswanathan wrote:
In the near future, synthetic meat will hit the market for a cheap price so there is a high probability to create problems for farmers.

Could you help me edit the sentence?


I assume you want help with the wording, so I suggest something like:

In the near future, synthetic meat will be available in markets at a cheap price, which may create problems for farmers.


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I agree. The sentence is short and simple and effectively conveys the desired sense.

thar
Posted: Tuesday, June 30, 2020 3:03:02 AM

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Be careful about the difference between 'hit the market' ie be on sale in any way and 'in markets' meaning street stalls and small shops gathered together in one place.

The problems with the English in the original sentence are:

something is on sale at a cheap price (not 'with')
but it is easier to say it will be cheap meat

and

there is a possibility of something (not 'to' unless that is something you want to do)
but again it is easier to say 'possibly creating a problem for farmers'
vipin viswanathan
Posted: Wednesday, July 1, 2020 2:35:56 AM

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Thanks all..
one more doubt to clear.

..will be available in markets at a cheap price..
..Will be available in markets for a cheap price...

Why is 'for' preferred in the sentence?

Drag0nspeaker
Posted: Wednesday, July 1, 2020 6:04:33 AM

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Hi.
This is something I'd never noticed - though I used the "rule" myself, I never learned it.

You buy an item for $10. (One item costs you $10.)
Or you buy ten candles for $18. (This means that the total cost for all ten is $18.)

You buy something at $10. (The price asked for each item is $10.)
You buy ten candles at $18. (The price asked for each candle is $18. Total $180. Expensive candles!)

Your sentence mentions the price - the amount asked for by the seller,
So the preferred word is "at".
...will be available in markets at a cheap price...

It could be rephrased from the viewpoint of the buyers(how much they pay):
...will be available in markets for a small/low cost ...

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You do also hear the phrase "...buy (something) at low cost" (not "at a low cost").
This is an alternative idiom.
vipin viswanathan
Posted: Wednesday, July 1, 2020 6:13:11 AM

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Thanks a lot!

Could you explain little more on "hit a market" and "available in market"? And also on "in market" and "in markets"?

thar
Posted: Wednesday, July 1, 2020 6:14:56 AM

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Yes, sorry for adding to any confusion.

My correction should have been:

use
it is on sale at a low price (not for a low price.)

I put the incorrect usage as 'with' which I now see you hadn't actually used. I don't know where I got that from.

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