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D00M
Posted: Friday, December 08, 2017 12:23:59 PM

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Hello respected teachers,

Is the following fine?

In spite of her husband's insistence, Mathilda rushed out of the hall not to be noticed by rich women putting on their costly furs.

I am looking forward to your answers.
FounDit
Posted: Friday, December 08, 2017 2:11:49 PM

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D00M wrote:
Hello respected teachers,

Is the following fine?

In spite of her husband's insistence, Mathilda rushed out of the hall not to be noticed by rich women putting on their costly furs.


Not really. It's a bit awkward sounding as worded. We don't know what her husband insisted on, but assume it was that she remain. However, she rushed out of the hall. There was a reason to do that but the wording is not natural and could be worded better.

"...Matilda rushed out of the hall to avoid being noticed by the rich women who were putting on their costly furs.


A great many people will think they are thinking when they are merely rearranging their prejudices. ~ William James ~
NKM
Posted: Friday, December 08, 2017 5:03:53 PM

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As FounDit says, she rushed out "to avoid being noticed …".

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