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Topic: A poem
Posted: Tuesday, October 18, 2016 9:48:36 AM
Romany and Verbatim thank you for the time you spent in the evaluation of this poem. Mr. Verbatim I am happy with your words of encouragement, and glad you found my music on YouTube. I sincerely thank you both.
Topic: A poem
Posted: Saturday, October 15, 2016 6:29:33 AM
Hi there Mr. Romany, responding to your comment, I speak Portuguese. In the text it is not written 'critturs' but 'critters'. I made this little poem to illustrate one of my songs. I, in no way, meant to impress anyone with flowery words. The reason for my question was simply hear the opinion of connoisseurs, to see if this simple poem has some value from a literary point of view. It was just that. I apologize to all if I put this in the wrong place.

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Tabanelli
Topic: A poem
Posted: Tuesday, October 11, 2016 6:57:30 AM
Could you kindly correct the english literacy of this poem. The poem is vinculated to this song:


A moment of reflection

I am not a poet
I was not born a poet
I've never been a poet
However, here, at the seashore
By that orange glow sunset
I am an old poet, and also
I am The sky
The reddish clouds
The sea
The soft summer breeze
the breeze that touches my face,
I am the soft grass
And the fine sand under my feet
I am the small critters, and also
The wind
The seagulls
The waves
The continuos ripples
Bathing my feet.
Meanwhile,
With the sun setting,
I hear this song
The syncopated rhythm
That final flute
What does it mean?

Thank you
Tabanelli
Topic: My punctuation
Posted: Tuesday, September 15, 2015 4:55:03 PM
I am deeply impressed by your comments and I am sincerely grateful to all. Thank you.
Topic: My punctuation
Posted: Tuesday, September 15, 2015 8:40:59 AM
New here! I am not a native english person. I wrote the poem The Hunt, and someoane said it is full of punctuation mistakes. Could you kindly point them to me? Thank you all.

Here is the poem:

I smelled your parfum
And horrified
Sensed danger in the air
I am fast alert now
You hunt me
But you don't see me yet
You try to come
And obliquely
You keep coming
I hold my breath
Petrified
Than, suddenly...
You see...
And yell a poem at me
And you think... I got it!
My heart explodes
As possessed by unnatural instincts
I simply vanish
You missed me
I am fast running, now
In complete panic
Only the noise of my heart
Surrounds me
Than, I realized
That the sound of the very moment
You yelled, to subjugate me,
Is the only sound
That echoes in my mind
...Easy... easy... easy...
But I am free
And trying not to faint
Evading faster and faster
To my secrete shelter
Far away from your verses
Poet



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