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Amybal
Posted: Thursday, December 6, 2018 12:02:21 AM
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Hi, is there anything wrong in these sentences?

Short summary
When an unsuccessful rapper returns to his hometown to visit his sick father, he reconnects with his high school friend and family he left behind long ago.

Long summary
Hak Soo is an aspiring rapper in Seoul who is trying find stardom by competing in audition programs but never being able to get to the final round. After yet another rejection, he receives a call from his hometown that his father is in the hospital. He rushes his hometown, where he has left since high school only to find it is his father’s plot to bring him back. That includes his high school friend, Sun Mi, who had a crush on him.

FounDit
Posted: Thursday, December 6, 2018 2:21:28 PM

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Amybal wrote:
Hi, is there anything wrong in these sentences?
The short summary could be confusing in that it isn't clear if it is his family or the friend's family he left behind, but I think you mean his family.

Short summary
When an unsuccessful rapper returns to his hometown to visit his sick father, he reconnects with his family and a high school friend he left behind long ago.

Long summary
Hak Soo is an aspiring rapper in Seoul who is trying find stardom by competing in audition programs but is never able to get to the final round. After yet another rejection, he receives a call from his hometown that his father is in the hospital. He rushes back to his hometown, only to discover his father has plotted to bring him back. The plan also included his high school friend, Sun Mi, who had a crush on him.



We should look to the past to learn from it, not destroy our future because of it — FounDit
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