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Once constructed, the building will house the first temple we are looking forward to.
Is the sentence correct, especially with regard to the bold part?
Thanks.
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Hi Koh Elaine.
That first part "Once constructed" is perfect.
Somehow the last bit doesn't work right - "we are looking forward to". Other phrases and clauses would be OK - but somehow that one doesn't make sense. I think it's because the subject of the clause is "we", when I would expect it to be 'temple.
Once constructed, the building will house the first temple built this century. Once constructed, the building will house the first temple to have its own swimming pool.
Wyrd bið ful aræd - bull!
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Thanks, DragOnspeaker.
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I also think the problem is your construction of the clause.
It sounds like this is
the first temple you are looking forward to.
as if you dreaded all the others you have built!
The thing is, you don't look forward to a temple. You don't even look forward to a temple being housed.
You look forward to a temple being used.
So you need to bring in a new idea of what you are actually looking forward to.
Once constructed, the building will house our first temple, and we are looking forward to worshiping in this beautiful building.
Or whatever.
Does that make sense?
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 The constructed building will have the first temple once it has past inspection and we are looking forward to it.
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Thanks to all of you.
Hi thar, yes it makes sense.
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