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Amybal
Posted: Monday, July 9, 2018 5:37:00 AM
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Hi, do you see anything grammatically wrong in these sentence?

Naratu is a band name and Aidilfitri is a song name.

After approximately 21 years of involvement in the local music industry, this time the Naratu produce a song in conjunction with Hari Raya celebration, is called Aidilfitri.
Drag0nspeaker
Posted: Monday, July 9, 2018 9:02:07 AM

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Hi Amybal.

Personally, I would use the perfect, rather than present tense for the main verb (have produced) - but I would not say that the present tense is an error.

However, the 'is' in the final bit is unnecessary.

If you think of it as a clause, it would be "After approximately 21 years of involvement in the local music industry, this time the Naratu produce a song in conjunction with Hari Raya celebration, which is called Aidilfitri."

When you reduce a relative clause, you remove the relative pronoun and the 'be' verb.
"After approximately 21 years of involvement in the local music industry, this time the Naratu produce a song in conjunction with Hari Raya celebration, called Aidilfitri."

Wyrd bið ful aræd - bull!
Amybal
Posted: Tuesday, July 10, 2018 5:48:48 AM
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This is great, thank you Drag0nspeaker.
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