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RubyMoon
Posted: Saturday, October 08, 2011 10:15:13 AM
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Alias: Is that all ya wrote...?

Then a shadow just out of shot
a leviathan appeared anew
Its powerful jaws not hard to spot
chomp chomp and then.. adieu !!!


Think
IMcRout
Posted: Saturday, October 08, 2011 11:46:37 AM

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For whatever nefarious reason alias must have forgotten the last part.

All of a sudden, like a blue moon
emerged an iceberg with a swoon
and pierced our whale with its blue eye
"Release my friend!", it seemed to cry.

Poor Moby - as the pilot named it -
just groaned (the iceberg tamed it)
and faster than the heli's rotors
- unseen by all but wercoz' photors - (sorry)
disgorged the surfer from its belly
and all was peachy, just like on telly.


"Before I speak, I have something important to say."Groucho Marx
RubyMoon
Posted: Saturday, October 08, 2011 11:59:45 AM
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Ah, merci IMc!
Alias
Posted: Saturday, October 08, 2011 12:31:15 PM

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RubyMoon wrote:
Alias: Is that all ya wrote...?

Then a shadow just out of shot
a leviathan appeared anew
Its powerful jaws not hard to spot
chomp chomp and then.. adieu !!!


Think


Huh? OK Ruby but "Adieu" is a final statement, and of course it refers to the surfers demise...and the final destruction of the "idyllic" image...and ...as I said, It is an offhand dig at the churlish spat between WC and Kiker..who were both guiltty of taking themselves altogether a far TOO seriously!!! Or as is the local vernacular here..."They were all just a bit too Precious!"......

Anyway here goes just for you Ruby..continue from ".... adieu"
next stanza:

The water stained a ruby red,
the surfer's blood aflow
His body broken, chomped and dead
what a nasty way to go.

So let us now please understand
and learn our lesson well
Peachy picture paradise can
Quickly turn to bloody hell

If you you think that ended badly
Things would got much much worse
The ghostly copter crashed to sea
a victim of this strange curse.

The crimson waves lapped over it
the bodies within were trapped
like sardines within a tin they sit
each one a Squaleen's snack

An ocean liner came slowly into view
oblivious of whats ahead
All were partying in the Year anew
and all would soon be dead

An iceberg loomed across its bow
global warming was the cause Shame on you
the ship wrecked, sank, and now
they were all reduced to oars

Great Sharks from every quarter came
Giant squid, stingrays and all Anxious
The lifeboats tipped, its such a shame
none to hear their helpless call Pray

A terrible tale to be true
Or is it just a lie Liar
I will leave it up to yu
Cos now Ill say goodbye......


'(c) 2011

A Genie told me I could have one wish...Either a large Penis or a Long memory...I forget which one I chose. :)
Alias
Posted: Saturday, October 08, 2011 12:42:29 PM

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Actually I M and Ruby I was penning the above but having troube with my Pooter...it froze up...just rebooted now...

I have to say this to you My Dear Mr Mcrout
while my shaggy dogerrel is hardly art
Your rhymes are naught to write home about (geddit?)
but thanks nonetheless for playing a part..

Thank You and goodnight!!!Angel

A Genie told me I could have one wish...Either a large Penis or a Long memory...I forget which one I chose. :)
IMcRout
Posted: Saturday, October 08, 2011 1:07:14 PM

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Whistle



"Before I speak, I have something important to say."Groucho Marx
Marissa La Faye Isolde
Posted: Sunday, October 09, 2011 11:05:12 AM
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To Alias:

I see what your intentions were now.:) Thanks for the explanations.
Jyrkkä Jätkä
Posted: Sunday, October 09, 2011 11:26:03 AM

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Gulf of Finland in winter




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