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Amybal
Posted: Wednesday, September 11, 2019 10:17:37 PM
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Hi, is there anything wrong in these sentences?

Short summary
Catch up with your favorite pets and follow the adventures that occur when you are not at home with this fun box set of The Secret Life of Pets 1 & 2.


Long summary
Your favorite pets are back in this two-movie collection! Explore the deep bond between them and the families that love them, and answer the question that has long intrigued every pet owner: what are your pets really doing when you’re not at home with this fun box set of The Secret Life of Pets 1 & 2.
foolofgrace
Posted: Thursday, September 12, 2019 10:04:08 AM

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"what are your pets really doing when you’re not at home with this fun box set of The Secret Life of Pets 1 & 2."

This is just one minor observation but the sentence makes it sound like you're not sitting at home with the box set on your lap. Better might be:
"See what your pets are really doing when you're not at home by watching this fun box set..." You could specify further with "by watching the DVDs in this fun box set".

Not sure if it should be "box set" or "boxed set".
FounDit
Posted: Thursday, September 12, 2019 11:50:42 AM

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foolofgrace wrote:
"what are your pets really doing when you’re not at home with this fun box set of The Secret Life of Pets 1 & 2."

This is just one minor observation but the sentence makes it sound like you're not sitting at home with the box set on your lap. Better might be:
"See what your pets are really doing when you're not at home by watching this fun box set..." You could specify further with "by watching the DVDs in this fun box set".

Not sure if it should be "box set" or "boxed set".

I agree with the sentence change. It sounded odd when I read it, too.

In Ame, both "box set" and "boxed set" are used, and apparently both are acceptable.
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