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Born Villain
Posted: Friday, August 9, 2019 3:28:09 PM

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Hello. I just wanted to know if the bold part of the sentence is grammatically correct and sounds okay.

I will destroy everything that we had along with, even though chimerical, but hope that maybe someday we'll meet again.

Thanks in advance!
foolofgrace
Posted: Friday, August 9, 2019 3:35:48 PM

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I can't comment on correctness because I don't know what the sentence is trying to say.

Are you saying "I will destroy everything that we had along with us"? Like a suitcase?

Apart from that, the two ends of the sentence ("I will destroy everything that we had along with" and "but hope that maybe someday we'll meet again") don't seem to have anything to do with each other.
thar
Posted: Friday, August 9, 2019 3:49:00 PM

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I agree.

The bit outside the commas makes no sense.


And the bit inside the commas makes no sense.


So that's a "no".

I can't suggest improvements because I really don't get what you are trying to say.
jacobusmaximus
Posted: Saturday, August 10, 2019 2:35:24 AM

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Born Villain wrote:
Hello. I just wanted to know if the bold part of the sentence is grammatically correct and sounds okay.

I will destroy everything that we had along with, even though chimerical, but hope that maybe someday we'll meet again.

Thanks in advance!


Only you know what you are trying to say so you will have to find a simpler way of saying it.

I remember, therefore I am.
Born Villain
Posted: Saturday, August 10, 2019 1:59:09 PM

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Thank you for your comments.
I've rephrased it. Does it makes sense now?

I will destroy everything that we had between us, along with the hope - a chimerical one but still hope - that maybe someday we'll meet again.

"Glossary", so to speak
everything that we had between us — their romance;
a chimerical one but still hope — specifies the kind of hope that's slim and weak; the meaning of the phrase is that even though this hope is slim, it's still a hope.
BobShilling
Posted: Saturday, August 10, 2019 2:42:09 PM
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Born Villain wrote:

I will destroy everything that we had between us, along with the hope - a chimerical one but still hope - that maybe someday we'll meet again.


That's a lot better, though that does suggest that you will also destroy the hope. Change 'along with' to 'except for'
Born Villain
Posted: Sunday, August 11, 2019 3:47:43 AM

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BobShilling, but that's the intended meaning: they will destroy everything that they had between them AND all the hope for ever meeting again.
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