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Koh Elaine
Posted: Sunday, November 4, 2018 7:38:58 PM
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She found the intruder lying on top of her maid, with her clothes cut open and crying out for help. She told Wanbao that the man was threatening the maid with a pair of scissors.

Is "crying out for help" correctly used in the sentence? I think it is not clear who was crying. Am I correct?

Thanks.
NKM
Posted: Sunday, November 4, 2018 10:26:07 PM

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It's not really clear who was doing what to whom, nor even whose clothes had been cut.

Of course the context leads us to picture the most likely situation, but that's in spite of the ambiguous wording.

Koh Elaine
Posted: Monday, November 5, 2018 12:53:07 AM
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Thanks, NKM.

I have tweaked the sentence. Is it clearer?

The employer found the intruder lying on top of her maid, who was crying for help and whose clothes had been cut open by the intruder. She told Wanbao that the man was threatening the maid with a pair of scissors.
FounDit
Posted: Monday, November 5, 2018 10:23:06 AM

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Koh Elaine wrote:
Thanks, NKM.

I have tweaked the sentence. Is it clearer?

The employer found the intruder lying on top of her maid, who was crying for help and whose clothes had been cut open by the intruder. She told Wanbao that the man was threatening the maid with a pair of scissors.

Much better. The order could even be reversed:

The intruder had attacked the maid, had cut open her clothing, and was lying on top of her when discovered by her employer.



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Koh Elaine
Posted: Monday, November 5, 2018 12:17:41 PM
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Thanks, FounDit.
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