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My peom titled "The master brewer" Options
Ebenezer Son
Posted: Saturday, May 10, 2014 2:40:13 PM
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This is one of my lovely peoms that I wish to share with you:

There is a distillery in our brains.
It cane and malt, it hops and grains
Are the stuff our live are made of.

Blizzards or snows, bush fire or drought
Matches worn by penalty shoot-out
Fortune lost at toss of a coin:
Over these and their like you are no doyen

The fuel for this distillery?
Your emotions, Willy-nilly
You stoke the fire as you vent your spleen
And another dram drips into the vat-unseen


The Master brewer is not the stars
Nor yet the gods. He is you your very self.
The final brew has no choice it must be bitter bile or sweet honey.But you can choose the magic portion which vouchsafes the taste:
Your intentions, your memories, your reactions.

Thanks




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seemo74
Posted: Saturday, May 10, 2014 4:05:29 PM

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That is a good choice thanks .
Mr Epstein
Posted: Saturday, May 10, 2014 4:46:50 PM

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Sounds like your love of beer is always near...

Drool

Kenneth
ChristineC
Posted: Saturday, May 10, 2014 9:33:47 PM

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well...
moniquester
Posted: Saturday, May 10, 2014 10:16:09 PM

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Your second line leaves me puzzled and confoozled (confused). Please elucidate.

And why the long drawn-out second-last line??? Would it not have been possible to subdivide it into several shorter lines, in keeping with the remainder of your poem?



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Ebenezer Son
Posted: Sunday, May 11, 2014 3:53:41 AM
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Moniquister, sorry I used my phone to write that's why that long drawn-out line of the second last line appeared so.
It seems Kenneth read the peom and took the words literally.
Moniquester, this is the explanation of my peom:

The theme for this peom is that life starts from the mind. What ever happens to you in life is the result of what is brewed in the mind. Life is what you think.
I opened the peom with a metaphor. I have compared the brain of humans to a distillery which uses sugar cane, malt, hops and grains as its stuff to brew or manufacture drinks. The stuff in our minds in which our lives are made of is just like that of a distillery. Hence I wrote:

"There is a distillery in our brains.
Its cane and malt, its hops and grains
Are the stuff our lives are made of".

I went on to say that certain things happen naturally, for instance blizzards, bush fires, draught matches won by penalty shoot-out etc. Like these, human beings have no control over certain things in life. Your mind is the master of the whole body. There are certain things which happen to you in life in which you have no control except the mind, hence I wrote :

"Blizzards or snow, bush fire or draught
Matches won by penalty shoot out
Fortunes lost at toss of a coin:
Over these and their like you are no doyen"

The fuel for the distillery in your mind is your emotions. If it is of anger, if you stoke it, as you vent your spleen more troubles will be brewed.
Before you realise things would have got out of hands:

The fuel for this distillery?
Your emotions, willy - nilly
You stoke the fire as you vent your spleen
And, another drips into the vat-unseen

The Master Brewer is not any extraodinary person. He is neither the stars nor the gods. He is you(human), your very self. What ever is brewed in the brain, whether it is sweeta as honey or as bitter as a bile, you have no other choice than to take it like that:

" The master Brewer is not the stars
Nor yet the gods. He is you, your very self




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Ebenezer Son
Posted: Sunday, May 11, 2014 4:46:11 AM
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I was called and was interrupted, I'm continuing from where I reached, therefore I go:

"The Master Brewer is not the stars
Nor yet the gods. He is you, your very self.
The final brew has no choice: it must be bitter bile or sweet honey."

However, you have the magic potion which will heip you to determine your taste. The magic potion is your intentions, your memories and your reactions. If you want to be happy in life you have to check your intentions, analyse your memories and then control your reactions, hence I wrote:

"But you can choose
The magic portion which vouchsafes the taste:
Your intentions, your memories your reactions."

I know only one thing - that is that I know nothing.
moniquester
Posted: Tuesday, May 13, 2014 4:36:00 PM

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Hi Ebenezer:

Thanks for explaining the entire poem! I did understand most of it, only the 2nd line was a bit difficult for me--but now I get it.

I like your poem. I don't agree with it 100%, but I like it. It's well laid-out, well-developed, and an interesting read.

I hope you continue writing poetry as well as prose, because you have a knack for it.

Have a great day, Ebenezer!

Be the change you wish to see in the world!-Gandhi
Seth Boss Kay
Posted: Wednesday, May 14, 2014 2:56:28 AM

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This poem was written by Lade Worsonu. So I wonder why Ebenezer is saying it is his poem.
Ebenezer Son
Posted: Monday, May 26, 2014 3:12:03 PM
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Hi Seth, I should have answered you in a couple of months ago - but I seldom come here I'm sure someone must have plagiarise this peom, I joined a forum many years back that we[I and others in the forum] share our peoms and read them. And I'm sure a member must have copied and plagiarise it, by the way I have many peoms that I would like to write them here - that members will comment about how well developed it is and how laid out it is

Thanks

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Seth Boss Kay
Posted: Thursday, June 12, 2014 7:35:22 PM

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Ebenezer, no one pliagirised this work of yours; Ľade Wosornu started writing poetry before you were born and it is obviously no coincidence that one of his most famous poems has the same title and lines as this particular poem. Google his name of you don't believe it; I read The Master Brewer about ten years ago. This ain't yours
jacobusmaximus
Posted: Friday, June 13, 2014 2:46:26 AM

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Well spotted and reported, Seth Boss Kay. I am astonished that someone can be as dishonest - and as stupid - as Ebenezer.

I remember, therefore I am.
Seth Boss Kay
Posted: Saturday, June 14, 2014 10:03:06 AM

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I am glad I have a witness.
For those who do not believe,
www.wosornu.com is his personal
website. You can visit that site and
you will know what I am talking
about.
shahidmost
Posted: Saturday, July 5, 2014 8:56:53 AM

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**

In that fit of a drunken drawl
The mind distils no sense at all
Actions without a motive ensue
Memories raise such boisterous brawl

A wee bit more to ward off the chill
A little sip will never tastelessly kill
A drop, a dram, a sip a tot, such good fun!
It is heaven, and all is well! Up until!

The mighty waves begin to roll
The seasoned boatswain lose his poll
Upon the deep where he was tossed
The heady seas will take its toll

Masters may not be the stars
But heavens will never be far
To grant the self its right of passage
But the self oneself will bar


**
Romany
Posted: Saturday, July 5, 2014 9:48:44 AM
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Seth -

As soon as I read this poem I googled it. Simply because it didn't sound in the least like Ebenezer and referred to things and ideas which seemed completely unsuited to his personality. Also a lot of the vocab. didn't seem to fit with Ebenezer's personal word-hoard.

So I simply ignored the thread: plagiarising to me - as both writer and a teacher - is the most cardinal and serious sin a writer can commit. So I hesitated to make the accusation.

Now you make me feel ashamed - again as a writer and teacher - that I just let it go.

This has been a disgraceful incident.
Jagadeesh Bangalore
Posted: Saturday, July 5, 2014 12:19:27 PM

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Yes, it surely seems to be plagiarised. Please visit :
1. < http://afrilingual.wordpress.com/tag/poem/ > The Master Brewer – Lade Wosornu Posted: January 6, 2013 in GHANAIAN POETRY;
2. <http://afrilingual.wordpress.com/tag/lade-wosornu/ > of same date.
This SURELY has been a disgraceful incident!! Shame on you Alas!!!
[P.S.: Throughout his posts, Ebenezer Son refers to his 'peoms', which in itself should be a pointer Boo hoo! ]

To 'BE' or to 'AE' ?!!
atta gyamfi
Posted: Wednesday, April 18, 2018 1:30:06 PM

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it's quite funny....Lade Wosornu is a celebrated Ghanaian poet and writer. I read his poems in high school. so, imagine my surprise when Eben said someone had stolen his poem. seriously?????? anyway I love the master brewer...it's a great poem..one of the few poems I have memorised..
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