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Palinkasocsi
Posted: Sunday, February 11, 2018 11:31:32 AM
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Dear Friends,

Could anyone please tell me if this sentence is too convoluted or not:

In this essay I will relate metonymic explanatory models to empirical findings (on metonymy) from neurology, psychology and psycholinguistics.

Is 'on metonomy' in parentheses necessary?

Thank you!

Pal
thar
Posted: Sunday, February 11, 2018 12:35:15 PM

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I don't think the brackets are good here - it belongs in the main sentence, as it is not additional information.


If you are relating them, isn't metonymy in the models, as well? If so, it belongs there.
If not, how can you relate it to examples?

I don't like "empirical findings", though - there is empirical evidence, and conclusions you draw from that evidence, but 'findings' feels redundant.
Palinkasocsi
Posted: Tuesday, February 13, 2018 12:15:44 PM
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Thank you very much Thar!

Pal
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